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He shuddered like a man on his death bed,
watching those dark thoughts infest his sad head.
They muttered secrets he kept from his wife,
they saw his affair and his other life.

They kissed his dreams with his own wicked lies,
fastened to his mind, and never untied.
He missed when the incubi ignored him,
but they swore the man would retain his sin.

Imps by the thousands poured guilt in his blood,
it thickened with hurt to deep painful mud.
He tried to move, but his muscles were scorn,
and in each second more hate thoughts were born.

The man had no choice, the fiends ruled madly.
Always he suffered, his mind never free.
The scamp-trolls decided to bite and shove,
and goblins of hatred stole all his love.

The memory demons played with his brain
until he merely felt badness and pain.
His vanity stabbed, he finally cried.
The demons pierced him again while he died.
©2004-2009 ~Balletbabymari
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I bet alot of people have heard the word "incubus"... wonder how many know what it means.

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:iconthe-hyrax-lord:
it thicked with hurt to deep painful mud.
aside from this one line, which sounded a little too forced, this was an awesome poem...reminded me of like an 18-rated version of the opening scene from labyrinth...damned good, it had tension and that, it caught in my throat...

also, i know what an incubus is ^_^ so there =P

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:D thanks. comparison to labyrinth ... *faints from flattery*
i figured you, of anyone, would know the definition of incubus.

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Very good. :D

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:iconballetbabymari:
thank you. do you know what incubi are?

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Don't know if I'm correct, but I -believe- an Incubus is a demon, usually taking male form, that descends on people (particularly women) and either rapes them or induces enticing dreams and such.
Don't know if I'm right, just guessing off the top of my head. ;D

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:icontormentedsorrows:
beautiful job. It never really mattered to me what incubus was but i looked it up and know now. lol

with this line

"it thicked with hurt to deep painful mud"

it would sound better if you said thickened since thicked really isn't a word [i don't think...lol]

but anyways, great poem! I loved it =D

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thanks so much... i just realized i typed "thicked" :| lmao. :D thanks for the :+fav: too.

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lol, that's a perfect definition. it can also be a nightmare of the sort.

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You're welcome, it was an awesome poem

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